Thursday, March 25, 2010

WIP - Have you ever given a toaster wrong info?

Yes that was what Ijeoma did. Read on...


The sun was beating down fiercely that day as Ijeoma was going back to the hostel with Nneka after their lectures.

“Hey,” somebody yelled, “Ifeoma wait up.”

The sun was really blinding but it seemed the person was gesticulating at them so they waited at the side of the road for him to catch up.

“Who could that be? Did he say Ifeoma or Ijeoma?” Nneka wondered aloud.

“I can't say,” Ijeoma replied and then her heart jumped into her mouth, as she made out the built of Ifeanyi in the approaching guy.

"I think I recognize him,” she whispered.

Just then the sun went behind the clouds and she fully opened her eyes to see Ifeanyi Apia standing in front of them.

“Rest awhile strained eyes, cease squinting but just for sometime. Behind the clouds is the sun still shining,” Ifeanyi misquoted jovially.

They both smiled and then Nneka looked at Ijeoma enquiringly as if to ask, “Who is this guy, do you know him?”

Ifeanyi looked at her expectantly and she sighed inwardly as she introduced them, “Nneka, this is Ifeanyi Apia and this is my friend Nneka...”

“Nneka, the pretty serpent?” Ifeanyi asked humorously extending his hand. “Oh no!” Nneka replied returning the handshake.

“Ifeoma,” he began turning to her, “ I...”

“It's not Ifeoma but Ijeoma,” Nneka put in as she corrected him.

Ijeoma felt like sinking into the ground at their feet as Ifeanyi turned accusing brown eyes in her direction but he covered up cleverly as he continued, “Oh yes, Ijeoma, I don't see you reading in that class anymore. I hope everything is alright?”

“Nothing is wrong,” Ijeoma assured him, “its just that I've been going more to the library with Nneka since then.”

“Okay, I just decided to find out anytime I saw you,” he said searching her face.

He knew she was avoiding him but this was not the time to talk about that.

“Thanks for your concern,” Ijeoma replied, “We'll see you later one of these days.”

“No doubt about that,” Ifeanyi replied confidently, letting her know he wasn't giving up on her. At least, not just yet. “See you both later.” He added as he turned away.

“Bye.” he heard both of them reply and then as they walked away, he turned back and crept after them. He heard Nneka whisper furiously, “You gave him a wrong name? Where did you meet him?”

Ijeoma laughed. “Haven't you ever done the same? I met him at the class, two weeks ago,” Ijeoma replied.

“I won't mislead a guy this fine! Wow, he's a hunk,” Nneka breathed.

“I noticed him even before he spoke to me because he's so handsome,” Ijeoma confessed.

At this point, Ifeanyi turned back and went on his way. He smiled to himself. At least she had remembered his full name, the day they had met and she considered him handsome. Thank the good Lord for small mercies, he thought as he joined his friends.

“Ifeanyi, you are looking very happy these days, Guy what's up?” Ugo asked.

Ugo and Johnson were sitting in their favourite spot in the plaza sipping drinks when he joined them. Ifeanyi greeted them with their usual handshake.

“Hey there, get me a coke,” Ifeanyi called to the bar girl as he sat beside them.

Johnson who had been sitting down, as far back as he could, drawled lazily, “Oh, don't you know he is the latest lover boy on campus?”

“What?” Ugo remarked amused, “In just one semester, that's fast men.”

“Don't mind JJ and his stories,” Ifeanyi replied laughing. “Do I look as if any babe is giving me sleepless nights?” He asked.

Sitting up Johnson queried, “I don't see you anymore nowadays, what did she say?”

“Hey man, not so fast, trust me I am a cool guy,” Ifeanyi replied in an easy mood.

“Oh so you mean this is a true business?” Ugo asked feeling left out. “Who is the girl?”

“Of course.” Johnson replied aloofly. “But you won't know the girl.”

He always tried to put Ugo down whenever Ifeanyi was around. Ifeanyi had transferred to UNEC; University of Nigeria Enugu Campus from University of Ibadan after his parents had packed down from Lagos back to Enugu. They were very rich and Johnson, quite rich in his own right was almost like a sycophant to him.

Now he spoke to Ifeanyi excluding Ugo, “What do you think we should do tonight? Should we go and visit her?”

“Since when did I start visiting her with you, if that's even any of your business?” Ifeanyi asked in an irritated voice. Turning to Ugo he said, “Do you need another bottle?”

“Yes, of course, how can I turn down an offer of a drink?” Ugo replied.

Ordering another set of drinks; Ifeanyi turned the conversation to general matters. Johnson wanting to save face, joined in animatedly.

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28 Comments, Add Yours and Share!:

  1. just like IJEOMA,IVE GIVEN A FALSE NAME NT ONCE OR TWICE. HAHAHAHAHA. Nneka don spoil show oh.

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  2. and yeah.... i'm so FIRSSSTTTT. my lucky dai.

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  5. I have a name I give to anybody I dont know. I use it for reservations, cabs,at clubs,Its kind of second nature now..LOL!

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  6. of course
    when i was in sec sch

    when i became older
    i didn't acknowledge you
    no matter what you did

    if i acknowledge you, then i have considered you worthwhile...

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  7. lol...nice...hmmm,i can't count how many times i've given a false name o. from hausa to ibo to yoruba to delta, even english name sef..all join! ...lol

    p.s : myne, in the 5th paragraph, is it meant to be built or BUILD? pls check.

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  8. I enjoy the dialogue, its very descriptive; however I feel like you could add more descriptions of the surroundings just so we are aware of what is around them. Nice :)

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  9. before nko?
    fake name + fake phone number + fake address
    or sometimes just plainly ignoring the person.

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  10. Ijeoma is a crazy girl sometimes,lol I have given a toaster everything wrong before, I pity the company he called.lol

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  11. I can see that all of us are the same, lol. Girls will always be girls it seems.

    @Mwajim, thanks for noting that, I will take it on board.

    @Beautiful, sharp looking out. Thanks!

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  12. Hehehe, yea we all do that always giving fake info. Good as always.

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  13. Interesting. Yea thats what girls always do, i have done it so many times.lol

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  14. This was nice oo...Ijeoma messed up, the fake name was too close to her real name nau...lol...

    Hmmm, I have a feeling that "something" is gonna happen btw the 2 of them...

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  15. I enjoy reading your work, it's like watching a movie.

    Likey.

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  16. yeah, Mwajuim's right..a little description regarding surroundings would be best. Although, this an interesting read.

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  17. I took more of the "fake number" than "fake name" approach... Like you said, girls will always be girls. :)

    I can see the characters developing... Johnson is a little too eager to please and I sense this will breed some tension within the group. I like the way this is going... Well done, Myne!

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  18. Thanks for the comments, I have grasped quite a few pointers.

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  19. This is nice, Myne

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  20. I can say that I have given a fake number (always change the last digit by one) but not clever enough to think of a fake name on the spot. LOL! Although, many thought I was giving them a fake name anyway. Especially when I was with my other good friend who is also named "Bianca" - not very common for two friends to both be named that!

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  21. A little surface like..A bit typical,What I like in the story was the hilarious part about giving a fake name..
    If you could work on this episode again?

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  22. ok nice one ,i hope ifeanyi doesnot give up,badsharpguy

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  23. @2cute, I usually rework the chapters based on comments. But I don't want to drag the story back by posting the rewrites too often. Thanks for the feedback.

    @Muyiwa, lol...

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  24. I really like this one. The writing was really good because it flowed so I was able to get into the story. You're an awesome writer!

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  25. oh definitely, definitely...back in the day, of course!

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  26. I was laughing when reading this because it is so believable. I recently had a fellow nigerian "stalking" me...these men... Maybe I am hard on Ifeanyi because I am not into guys right now.

    I have no constructive critique...enjoyed this all the way.

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