Tuesday, March 2, 2010

WIP - Another Journey begins; come with me.

So I have started working on my next manuscript. The work in progress (WIP) is titled; Ghost of the Past. This is just the very rough first draft, so expect a lot of typos, grammar errors, etchetaram. Also, names are subject to change, places and settings are tentative, and a lot of cleaning up will definitely take place before this even becomes a manuscript. But if you want to observe and partake of a writer's journey, come with me. Please your feedback is very much a part of it and will be really appreciated. Thank you.

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10 years ago. A small university town, Nigeria.


Ijeoma Oraka arrived at the lecture hall just in time because as soon as she sat down, the lecturer strolled in. It was Dr. Okafor, the BUS 201 lecturer. The man was a truant, coming to class only as he liked. The only favour he did his students was to give them the course outline and his lecture notes.

As usual, he went straight to the blackboard and wrote out his course and the topic for the day. He then turned back to the class.

“How many of you have read ahead on this particular topic, Entrepreneurship?”

Nobody answered and he began a long tirade that always took up half of his lecture hour. Finally he started on the real lecture and seconds later, Ijeoma was lost in a doze, oblivious to the bustle in the hall as the lecture went on. “You! Tell me what I just said now,” Mr. Okafor shouted in rankled tones. Ijeoma started awake but couldn't understand what was happening till her friend pinched her and she looked directly at Mr. Okafor to see him staring under glowering eyebrows at her. All sleep quickly fled from her eyes.

“Young lady, what did I just say?” He repeated slowly as if speaking to a dim-witted and recalcitrant child.

Ijeoma stood up lost for words, “Ehm ... Sir, you see... ehm... ehm...”

“Yes? Go on...” Mr. Okafor encouraged with utmost sarcasm in his voice. “You were speaking on a sole entrepreneur, sir and you said...”

Before she could complete the sentence, the whole class burst out in wolf whistles and catcalls as one of the ajibo girls sneezed loudly. Some of the boys shouted “rendered homeless” while others stamped their feet and clapped their hands. “What is this noise all about?” Okafor asked looking around perplexed. A bold guy stood up at the back of the class and replied “Sir, millions of bacteria have just been rendered homeless and we were just trying to kill them before they could contaminate us,” he ended.

“You are all sick,” Dr. Okafor declared with an air of amusement. Packing his books he declared, “ Well... since I don't want to be infected too, I beg to take my leave.”

This last was said with the air of somebody who had been asking for something and it had been handed over on a platter of gold to him.

Some of the backbenchers continued whistling, but for a different reason, as the lecturer took up his books and left the class.

“That man is a real truant,” Nneka complained to Ijeoma as they left the class soon afterwards. “Imagine just leaving the class for a silly thing like that”

“I was lucky, don't you realize that girl let me off the hook?” Ijeoma asked in reply.

“But really Ijeoma, what were you even thinking about? It is not like you to be absent minded in class,” Nneka stated.

“My dear, the fact is that I wasn't just absent minded, I was dozing,” Ijeoma replied. “You don't mean it! Nneka admonished.

“I am very serious. When you left the library last night, Ngozi persuaded me to read till dawn, you know now, TDB.” Ijeoma told her with a yawn. “And you didn't sleep a wink?”

“Exactly, you know me now, once reading I can't fall asleep,” Ijeoma replied, “but trust Ngozi, she fell asleep once it was midnight and didn't stir or wake up to read again till this morning when we had to return to the hostel.”

They both burst out laughing as they walked to their hostel. That had been their last lecture of the day and Ijeoma knew that once she got to her room, it was straight into her bed for a very long siesta.

“The unseen swot,” Nneka mocked, “I don't think I can deceive myself like that.”

“It's really good if one can read throughout, but my friend, the demerits are just too much for my liking, sleeping in the class for one.” They both burst out laughing again.

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ps, the Cupid's Risk series will debut on March 10th, get ready. Anybody interested in contributing for this season should me an email. myne @ mynewhitman.com.

42 Feedbacks - Add yours!:

  1. 2nd!!!

    i will follow u wherever u go :)
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  2. awww mine
    great job...
    i wondre what the story will be about..
    fingers crossed
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  3. Looks good so far... I wish I better understood the pidgin!
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  4. This time around I MUST read till the end!

    Good ol' university days. I am still trying to figure out the whole story line.
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  5. Yep wherever you go,,we shall follow-o? I like the feel of it though, the whole uni concept. :)
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  6. same thing...im curious, whats it about. i will def follw this to the end. im with you myne.
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  7. Interesting so far. Looking forward to reading more.
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  8. this brings back memories. Uni days were the best indeed!
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  9. i wonder what this story is about. i just sent you a mail
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  10. Intresting as always, looking forward to read more.
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  11. Myne,this story is funny,i could feel Dr okafor's pain ,it made me remember a scene like this,lmao,nice one
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  12. Seems very interesting...can't wait to read more!
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  13. Will dfinitly follow dis. LOVE THE WHOLE UNI CONCEPT.
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  14. More! More!! We want more!!!
    LOL, already sounds interesting :)
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  15. aaaaw I can't wait to read more. So glad that your going to write a second one!!
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  16. Definitely brings back memories!! I will be on the lookout for future updates... Well done Myne!
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  18. I like... i like. There is a fond naija feel to it.
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  19. Thank you all for the nice comments. I want some tough ones too. Like...Is it realistic enough?
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  20. This is nice,I'm late a gain and it pains me to no end that I'm never on time here.. Well I hope I'd be able to follow up on this.. Can't say much about it cause what I'm reading now, is a bit typical, too common Like exactly what you see everyday on Naija movies.,(sorry)But I'm sure subsequent posts will be better..
    PS, I'm your fan.. No vex say I talk as I talk.
    www.askchacha4free.blogspot.com
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  21. Interesting...You always getting me reading to the end...I look forward to more...In response to your comment on my blog, I have been well oh...Just trying to establish myself in this business they call law practice...How have your been, my lady?
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  22. Chacha, It is exactly your kind of comment I am looking for. Please keep it coming, lol.

    @Chix, thanks for your comments. All the best in your work, I know you're an excellent lawyer.
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  23. Interesting... themes of friendship, education, youthfulness, perhaps?

    Reading this I was getting some ideas about the characters... Nneka seems free-spirited. Ijeoma seems to be into her books since it obviously suprised Nneka when Ije tells her she was dozing... Ije arriving "just in time" also shows she takes education seriously. I like the set-up, a typical day at lecture (excluding the lecturer that leaves just like that). I'd like to have seen an adjective or adverb in the first sentence that establishes the state of mind of Ijeoma and makes the reader question why. i.e. "Ijeoma Oraka arrived *insert adverb/adjective here* at the lecture hall..." Something like that sha but that's just me...u can even ignore this comment lol nice work Myne.
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  24. Hi Myne,
    I'm still waiting to see how it develops but I think it's a nice beginning. Chacha is right - it does seem a tad like the intro to a Nollywood movie and I don't know why I feel a third party presence to the story-telling, almost like I can see someone over your shoulders saying, yeah so these are the typical happenings on campus.

    But on the other hand, its still captivating especially because with the intro, the story could head just anywhere and you have to read it to know.
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  25. I can't wait to see where this story goes and I will be following it.
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  26. Omotade , I really appreciate the comment. I read that first bit again and I see what you mean. I think you have a great eye for detail because you're right about the characters. Right on the money infact, lol.

    @Adenike, I try to avoid omniscient (third party) views in writing but I guess I have to improve on this one. I intend my stories to go to screen so I like that people can see this as a movie already.

    @Suru, thanks.
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  27. You are indeed becoming a professional writer Myne. I'll be following this!
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  28. I would like to see where this story goes... I like the campus setting: are we going to see a Jenifa/Gbogbo Bigz Gehlz scenario? Don't mind me... Just throwing it out there...

    Did the love languages post, by the way... M finally moved her lazy ass, lol.
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  29. Myne, loving this. Very authentic, reminded me of my uni days. I laughed at the reaction to the sneeze, I literally saw the scene playing out before my eyes. Not all your readers are Nigerian, foreign readers would be able to catch a glimpse of typical uni/campus life. Well done.
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  30. Looks good,paints a picture in my head. what is "TDB" by the way?
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  31. Enkay, F, JustJoxy and Shola, Thank you.

    @F, some big gals will come into the picture later. But not Jenifa type, lol.

    @Shola, thanks for pointing that out, it is till day break.
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  32. you really really do write well...love it
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  33. Myne,

    I will get lost in your site. I must come back when I have a huge chunk of time in a couple of days. Excited! I'm already hooked on your new tale.
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  34. Your university atmosphere is dead-on and alluring. You must keep in mind that you are trying to hook an agent who has read a tidal wave of university-grounded novels.

    You must hook the agent within the first paragraph or she/he will turn to the next manuscript in the slush pile. Give the agent something about which to cock his head in interest. It can be a simple, short sentence that hopefully will bring him/her up short and say, "This could be interesting."

    Come check out my own first page and see if I have followed my own advise. Don't you hate it when you stab yourself with your own advise?

    Have a healing weekend, your friend in Lousiana, Roland
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  35. Hi, Myne, thank you for the very kind words. If you'd like to see a brief glimpse of the magic that surrounds Samuel McCord, you could visit this post of mine {don't be skiddish of the title which refers to the one great love of Sam's long life.}

    http://rolandyeomans.blogspot.com/2010/02/what-is-romantic-to-you.html

    Thanks again for visiting the blog detailing my dream of being published. I pray that The Father grants you a quick publication of your own novel. Have only happy surprises this weekend, Roland
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  36. Thank you so much for your reply and I'll surely visit the recommended post.
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  37. http://rolandyeomans.blogspot.com/2010/02/what-is-romantic-to-you.html
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  38. oho! abeg forgiveness, Myne. i found the other WIP posts in my email...unread *sheepish*.

    I am catching up NOW!
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  39. And I am so out of it I see I even previously commented on this post last month. hehe...let me go quiet myself

    :-)
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