Saturday, October 10, 2009

I want to...(Poem)

I want to make you happy
All the days of our life
I want to see you smiling
As I say something nice
I want to satisfy your heart
With every blessing in the world

I want to save your pride
And mend your broken heart
I want to make you forget
That you were ever sad
I want to give you all
That you had ever wanted

I want to bring out the best
That you have inside of you
If only you will let me
I’ll never ever go away
Cos the greatest thing I want
Is just to be with you
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  1. Nice, warm ballad, without getting mushy.
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  3. aww this is so sweet
    i need someone to dedicate smthn this nice to me
    lol
    i like!
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  5. Myne-lady, hope dis poem isn't wasted. Oya, spill already - who is it for?? :)
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  6. Myne, is this for your own personal Edward lol! it's sweet
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  7. nice!!!
    i like how genuine it sounds....
    xx
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  8. Thanks guys, this was written and dedicated to my SO, my own personal Eddy, LOL. So Kay9, it was not wasted.
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  9. "If only you will let me,I’ll never ever go away"

    Beautiful and explicit words from the heart..
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  10. I love this, very beautiful. Your SO is a very lucky man o. :-)
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  11. I want to save your pride
    And mend your broken heart
    I want to make you forget
    That you were ever sad...

    For some reason, i like this part. Also the fact that the words used are everyday words, things that everyone can relate with...its not complicated or abstract
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  13. Thanks all, I appreciate your comments.

    @Jhazmyn, I'm your everyday poet and writer. Thanks.

    @ Muyiwa, why no comment? LOL
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  15. I want someone to write a poem like this for me :(
    Me likey
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  16. awwwwah!! This is really nice..
    Like Jhazmyn said, you use everyday words yet everything has so much meaning... Good Job:)
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  18. uhm, Myne, this is my 1st time of commenting on ur blog...I usually just read n move on, but this is sooooo.....nice...very touching...I don't know much about poetry, but weldone.
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  19. awww..
    this is so sweet..
    x
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  20. Real...is what i call it..

    i like how it encapsulates the urge to give and give and give that envelopes you when you fall in love..
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  21. Thanks for all your wonderful comments.
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  22. Hmm...heartfelt eh?
    (making allusion to ur last post...Could it be that you are falling in love?)

    Reminds me of Ella Fitgerald's "..I want to be happy, but I cant be happy till I make you happy too.."
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  23. Loooovely. In a perfect world both halves of every couple would be striving for this.
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  26. Myne is this for me, you shouldnt have.....
    I am sure is for your hubby. Very Sweet...
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  27. This is a beautiful poem. I like the flow of the poem and how each line connects to the next. it was well written, in such a way that anyone can understand. kudos
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